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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
Most
people
 want to find an opportunity for their job, going to another
country
 might be the answer. While there are those
people
 who believe that living in a foreign
country
 can cause
people
 trouble and some practical problems, I totally agree with
this
 statement because someone can not adapt themself to fit in that
country
 properly.
This
 will lead them to do not have any friends or do something improperly.
To begin
 with,
people
 who are considered an introvert will have a social problem because they are awkward and feel exhausted to meet
people
.
For example
,
although
 those
people
 know that going to the meeting event can help them join the social
group
 easily, they would prefer to go home rather than go to that event.
This
 will lead them to disconnect from the social
group
.
People
 who are not able to fit in the
group
 will struggle to be part of the
group
 because others do not feel well with those.
Moreover
, someone goes abroad
although
 they cannot talk understandably, causing them to find new colleagues harder because they could not interact with each other. These bolstered that going to some countries that speak another language might make them against the problems.
Furthermore
, some groups of
people
 behave something that improper to that
country
, leading population in that
country
 misunderstand them. When folks take a photograph in British,
for instance
, they should not raise point finger and middle finger together because it has a rude meaning in the
country
. To conclude,
people
 have to prepare themselves as much as possible o adapt to suit that
country
.
Otherwise
, they will have a problem indeed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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