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A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her explain how to apply for the job

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Dear friend, I got your email about a job that you are looking for. There are many vacancies in different companies. One of my cousin's
company
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 has a vacancy for a software developer. Software engineer develops different kinds of
program
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 including customize and regular updates. In
this
 position, you have to work part of the time, you need to be creative on
this
 post. Regular meeting attendance, focus, and dedication to the work will help you to fit into the working environment. As you have done application software course and your knowledge about it, can bring you up in career.
This
 position is the best fit for your career growth. To apply for
this
 position, you can visit XYZ company's career website where you can add my cousin's name in the refer section or you can share your CV, so I can refer you to my cousin to apply on your behalf. Regards, XYZ
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coherence cohesion
Try to use more cohesive devices to connect ideas more smoothly. For example, use linking words like 'moreover,' 'in addition,' or 'furthermore' to connect your sentences and make your writing flow better.
task achievement
Make sure to check for small grammatical errors and refine sentence structures for better readability. For example, instead of saying 'Software engineer develops different kinds of program including customize and regular updates,' you could say 'A software engineer develops different kinds of programs, including custom software and regular updates.'
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by elaborating on your points more clearly. For instance, explain what skills and experiences make this job a good fit for your friend in a separate section. This will make each idea stand out more clearly.
task achievement
The letter addresses all the task requirements: discussing the job, explaining its suitability, and instructing on how to apply.
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The tone of the letter is friendly and supportive, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
You end the letter with a proper closing, making it polite and professional.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reputation
  • industry
  • duties and responsibilities
  • typical day
  • skills and experiences
  • job requirements
  • company culture
  • personality
  • work ethic
  • application process
  • job listing
  • submit an application
  • documents required
  • tailored resume
  • cover letter
  • relevant experiences
  • reviewing documents
  • practicing for interviews
  • promptly
  • deadlines
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