Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays,
same
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products can be bought everywhere in the world.
This
is the main reason why almost all of the countries gradually become similar to each other.
Therefore
,
this
development has significant impacts on society both
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negative and positive. On
one
hand, being able to buy identical things wherever you are will make our life more convenient.
People
do not have to spend most of their time
on
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seeking a way to get the typical
one
.
For instance
, in the past when it is impossible to find the
exactly
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same thing in
different
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country
. If you live in Thailand, when you are craving
for
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sushi, the only solution is booking a flight to Japan which is the only
country
that can offer it for you.
This
means
people
are unable to buy sushi whenever they want whereas nowadays, Japanese food is sold almost in every
country
.
Therefore
, it is possible for them to get what they want even they do not live in that
country
, Japan.
This
is
one
of the advantages
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this
change.
On the other hand
, if similar products can be provided in every
country
, it will be the starting point of decreasing
in
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the
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diversity around the world.
Firstly
,
people
seem to be less value of their own local cultures. The traditional festivals and knowledge will be easily forgotten because
same
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thing can
be find
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everywhere.
People
do not have to pay attention to conservative
this
anymore. The uniqueness of every
country
will be demolished.
In addition
, the
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industry will be in
downward
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trend because there is no reason for
people
to travel overseas. As they can buy whatever they want in their own
country
.
This
affects directly in
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system.
People
whose work is related to tourism
such
as a tour guide or local shop's owner are going to face financial problems.
Therefore
,
this
will become a terrible situation in a long run. In conclusion, even though life will be easier if identical products can be found all over the world,
the disadvantages effects
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resulted
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from
this
improvement is more severe.
Therefore
, in my
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this
change is a negative
one
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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