In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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require more money for family for normal
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. Due to big
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difference
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countries
, family income amount
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huge. So family from
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type of country have to work more and sometimes both parent need to work. And
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choice. But in common fa
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if you have a choice, I feel that one parent need to be with their children due to a lot of risks exist nowadays in the world for
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  • dual-income household
  • financial stability
  • extracurricular activities
  • role models
  • self-reliance
  • independent
  • emotional well-being
  • work-life balance
  • neglected
  • quality time
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