It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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Punishment
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is not necessary and should be avoided entirely in helping
children
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learn the difference between right and wrong. As a tool in teaching,
punishment
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has multiple side effects that
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the learning
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undesirable and traumatic. The quality of the lesson itself is inadequate as reasonings and
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explanation
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may be missing entirely from the usage of
punishment
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. Many other tools
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exist to help
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learn, and
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they require more time and effort in administering, the result is well worth the effort.
Punishment
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inadvertently teaches
children
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that aggression and violence is
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acceptable means to justify right and wrong.
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the
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taught,
children
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learn from many other sources. They learn from the examples set by adults, the actions that they see, and even the words that they hear.
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means that
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learn from the
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of
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. Using
punishment
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shows that it is okay to teach or settle
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dispute
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through inflicting pain or suffering to condition others. While the method can be effective in preventing certain
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, it causes
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to accept the
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of aggression and violence and that they may
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participate in the
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of aggression and violence in the future.
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, sometimes
lessons
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can be incorrect or misunderstood and the
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of
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only serves to make matters worse when the
children
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are not at fault.
Punishment
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causes trauma. It does not provide reasoning or
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to help
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improve. The usage of
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relies on fear to prevent
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from performing certain actions.
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, the
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may not necessarily understand the validity of their
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.
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, by applying
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,
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method of teaching does not consider the reason behind the
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’s
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.
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prevents the
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from being able to voice their
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and opinion and only serves to increase their frustration.
Punishment
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makes learning overall a negative
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and
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children
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from participating in
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in the future. Many other forms of teaching are available that does not inflict pain or suffering
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children
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as part of the lesson.
Lessons
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can be taught through verbal
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as reasoning or discussion which allows
children
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to state their needs as well as opinions and helps them come to
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with their mistakes. While
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method takes more time, the time to adjust allows
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to acclimate to a new attitude to change their
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behaviour
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. Other techniques include visual
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explanation
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explanations
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like a demonstration to help
children
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see the differences between right and wrong and the consequences of their
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actions
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. Growth and
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, the sharing of
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memories can
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be effective in allowing
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to observe the consequences of each of their actions. In
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learning is possible without any
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of
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,
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punishment
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is unnecessary as many other methods of teaching
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higher quality
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without all the negative side effects. Avoiding using
punishment
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makes learning an encouraging
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that
children
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want to return to, promoting growth and maturity as the focus of the lesson.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disciplinary methods
  • emotional well-being
  • positive reinforcement
  • moral reasoning
  • behavioral issues
  • non-punitive
  • time-outs
  • loss of privileges
  • natural consequences
  • empathy
  • communication
  • physical punishment
  • aggression
  • correctional strategies
  • consistency
  • constructive discipline
  • open discussions
  • moral development
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