Smoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people with potentially serious effects on their health. Explain some reasons for this problem and suggest some possible solution.

Smoking is an expensive habit among the youngsters which pollutes the environment
as well as
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, as well as smoker health,
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smoker
health
affects tremendously. Nowadays,
this
trend
is become
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popular among
teen
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teens
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.
This
essay discusses what causes
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this
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troubles and gives some curable
remedy
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for the following reasons. Smoking is always a
dengerous
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dangerous
crisis and there are some
troubke
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trouble
troubles
of
this
, One of the main problems is
this
can stimulate many
health
illness
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such
as Lung cancer, Heart problem for
smoker
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, not only affects an active
smoker
but
also
affects the passive
smoker
too. Another crisis is countless folks are addicted to using
cigarette
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cigarettes
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because
this
gives some kind of
drug like
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Nictotine
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Nicotine
,
thus
, many teens are using an enormous quantity.
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, a recent report by WHO said that more than 80% of the teens are affected by smoking
cigarette
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cigarettes
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who developed nations because these countries have more winter season than summer,
hence
, they
smoking
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tremendously even five pockets
in
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daily. There are some possible solutions
of
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reducing
this
trend, One of the main remedies is the ministry should be increased the tax rate on
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a cigarette
the cigarette
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cigarette
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cigarettes
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in order to
buying
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tobacco quantity might be
reducing
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reduced
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by the smokers.
For instance
,
Australia
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Australian
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governments have already increased the tax amount on
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a cigarette
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cigarette
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cigarettes
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,
consequently
, their citizens buying that product ratio reduces
this
means they will be lived healthily. Another possible solution is the ruling party should be creating
the
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awareness about the side effects of smoking
oftenly
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often
since school days,
therefore
, they cannot think about it, These
reemdies
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remedies
can be solved
this
crisis. To conclude, smoking is like a slow poison,
this
can affect our
health
slow-by slow. Addiction and will
brings
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many
health
issues
is
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the reasons for
this
trend.
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the duty amount on tobacco and will create
the
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awareness is the possible solution
of
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this
. In my
opinnion
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opinion
, about
this
, the youngsters should not
used
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use
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any kind of tobacco and they must be given more attention
on
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to
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their
health
.
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