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These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages.

#phones #internet #people #outweight
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Mobile
phones
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 are the best devices to communicate information to any part of the globe.
Now-a-days
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smart
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smartphones
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phones
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has
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 been equipped with
internet
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 facility,
that
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 has made them more efficient and easy to perform many dedicated tasks than it was in
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last
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the last
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 decade . In
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next
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the next
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 few paragraphs,
i
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 shall explain the advantages and how it will
outweight
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outweigh
 its disadvantages.
Smart
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Smartphones
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phones
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was
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 manufactured with 3G and 4G technology that
give
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 them
access
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 to
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internet
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the internet
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 world, through which many complex works can be performed, which earlier require physical presence.
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, many activities like payment of school fees, grocery items, watching live football matches as well as
access
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 to stock markets earlier require
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physical visits to these facilities.
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,
internet
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access
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 on the mobile
phones
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 has changed the complete dimension of the way activities are performed earlier, by using
paytm
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Paytm
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 and credit cards payment can be undertaken via bank account transfer, as well as
resatuarant
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restaurant
 food items, grocery, electronic as well as any household things can
be order
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be ordered
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 via electronics platforms. According to
reasearch
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research
, conducted by Amazon.com in the year 2019, it was found that
,
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 General public ordering items online is
steep
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 rise from 10% in 2014 to 40% in 2019 and their satisfaction and experience
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 improved.
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, smart mobiles with
access
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 to
internet
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 data can make life easy and
hassle free
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.
Biggest
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 disadvantage of using
access
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of
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internet
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the internet
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 on electronic devices is that
,
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 they can
exploited
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be exploited
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 by
frausters
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fraudsters
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illegally
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access
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 of them through hacking and fishing. Hackers can easily reach victim devices and take control of it.
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 can perform online shopping, transfer funds or sell shares.
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, Every year Millions of worth of money is stolen in an illegal way and converted to virtual money like bitcoins and money laundering. To conclude,
advantages
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the advantages
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 of using
mobile
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a mobile
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 phone with
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internet
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the internet
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 underweight its disadvantages because
majority
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the majority
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 of people can perform all activities smoothly and efficiently without human interface and delay.
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 advantages of using it
is
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 more than its disadvantages.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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