Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
concurrent world, it is an undeniable fact that large
number of Change the article
a large
the large
supermarkets
are improved day by day and also
their development increases Vastly. Therefore
, in few
nations numerous small and local Correct article usage
a few
work
are not able to engage in the market. Replace the word
workers
Large
number of Change the article
A large
The large
people
believe that examine
of local businesses it will be destroyed native society. I completely disagree with Replace the word
examination
given
statement which will be discussed in Add an article
a given
the given
further
Add an article
a further
the further
paragraph
with their appropriate examples.
To embark with, several rational Fix the agreement mistake
paragraphs
influence
Change to a plural noun
influences
this
and leading one for this
is provincial field is necessary for all countries and it is also
helpful for our economy and create a safe community because many small field
Change to a plural noun
fields
are
attracted with Change the verb form
is
government
so local Add an article
the government
markets
are a major part of GDP. In other words
, a plethora of factories depends
on small employment because factories rely on to sell their products Change the verb form
depend
thus
without these small business
. Many factories are forced to close because of Change the determiner
this small business
these small businesses
supermarkets
and lots of people
are lost
their jobs in Change the form of the verb
losing
this
development. Moreover
, people
are mostly preferred to buy things
from local markets
because every essential items
are available Change to a singular noun
item
in
there and society can buy them Change preposition
apply
in
Change the preposition
at
reasonable
price rather than Correct article usage
a reasonable
supermarket
. Add an article
the supermarket
a supermarket
For example
, recent
survey of market union Add an article
a recent
suggest
that 80% of Change the verb form
suggests
community
Add an article
the community
are rely
on small or local businesses.
Change the verb form
relies
However
, people
seldom give a thought to ponder over the other side of story
Add an article
the story
that is
super
Correct your spelling
supermarkets
markets
are not available in countryside
due to the fact Add an article
the countryside
this
super market
Correct your spelling
supermarket
are only build
in city areas Change the verb form
are only built
consequently
community who live in countryside
are mostly Add an article
the countryside
depended
on of limited Replace the word
dependent
markets
because without regional markets
their life is become
harder. Change to the active voice
becomes
has become
Moreover
, in numerous supermarkets
things
are sold in heavy
range of prices which can not affordable for every person and these Add an article
a heavy
the heavy
things
are very expensive compare to the local markets
. For instance
, supermarkets
are included their extra 10% tax for every items
so prices of all the Change to a singular noun
item
things
are automatically increased rather than provincial businesses.
In conclusion, the seemingly inexorable debate about the regional or small field can keep on going. Nevertheless
, showing the deep reverence about all the aspect
and observing finer nuance for all matter mentioned . I espouse to Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
notion
for supporting paltry Add an article
the notion
supermarkets
are very important, and we have Fix the infinitive
to support
support
them.Change the verb form
supported
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