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Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar charts illustrate the percentage of adults from different
age
 groups in the UK who used the
Internet
 daily
form
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from
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 2003 to 2006. The concerned
age
 groups include 16 to 24
years
, 25 to 44
years
, 45 to 54
years
, 55 to 64
years
 and equal or more than 65
years
.
For instance
, the highest participation rate was demonstrated in the
group
 of 16 to 24
years
. Meanwhile, both 25 to 44
years
 and 45 to 54
years
 categories reflected similar levels of interest with medium level.
However
, the
participation
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participants
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 seemed to be slightly decreased in 2006 whereas
other
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another age group
other age groups
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age
group
, there was a continued spike of
internet
 interest over the
years
.
Moreover
, in the groups of 55 to 64
years
 and equal or more than 65
years
, the
internet
 usage was significantly lower than
other
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another age group
other age groups
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age
group
 especially in those who
was
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were
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 equal or more than 65
years
. Consecutively, the data indicated the correspond of lower
internet
 usage in comparison
of
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to
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 more advanced
age
group
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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