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In some countries, some criminal trials are shown on the television andthe general public can watch them, do you think the advantages of thisoutweigh the disadvantages?

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People
 from certain nations can watch criminal
trials
 on the television screen. While I understand it may cause some adverse effects to the public, personally, I do believe that there are more benefits of
this
 phenomenon. Admittedly, there are several downsides
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exposure. Primarily, showing criminal
trials
 on the screen violates the privacy of the culprits. The relatives of these
people
 who are guilty are likely to be discriminated
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 get prejudice from their acquaintances and the public because of the dissemination in
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social media.
Additionally
, with more criminal incidents reported, panic may take place in the general public. The sense of safety declines and the standards of living of those
people
 who are sensitive tend to be disturbed.
For example
, citizens living close to the place of crime are probably afraid to go out and there may be commotions in some loosely regulated communities.
However
, I still stand by there are more benefits. By disclosing the whole process of criminal
trials
, the entire level of legal consciousness of the society could be conspicuously enhanced.
This
 kind of TV program is an excellent form to build the legal conception for the juvenile. The most efficient way to prevent
people
 from committing is to educate them when they are young and watching criminal
trials
 is rather effective as
this
 approach gives a detailed and direct depiction of why the culprits are to be judged and what the end they face with, which can be an educational resource.
Besides
, the authentic criminal
trials
also
 function as a cautionary note to those who have a criminal tendency or lack basic law knowledge.
For example
, many individuals commit a crime due to the absence of awareness of the consequences of their
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.
Therefore
, the number of crimes could be reduced by the spread and publicity of law knowledge. In conclusion, compared with the drawbacks of the disclosure of criminal
trials
, I firmly insist that its advantages are more significant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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