Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

It is very important for every individual to play
sport
as it has the bulk of advantages but there are some
sports
like
sky
diving and skiing which could be very unsafe for any person. I completely disagree with the statement that it is very dangerous to play
such
sport
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and should be banned.
Firstly
,
Sky
diving and skiing are
also
sport
and lots of people play these
sports
. I have a question : How are these games risky? The environment in which skiing is done is prepared in a way that it should not injure any player.
Similarly
,
sky
diving is done with
lot
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of precautions.
Moreover
, they provide us with trainers when in need. To illustrate, I too once got fascinated by
this
game and so I too did
sky
diving.While I was nervous ,the way the trainer has consoled me was exceptional.So, I think it
not
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extreme
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an extreme
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sport
and need not
to
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be banned.
Secondly
, These types of
sport
help in exploring a person and they too help to overcome fears. A survey of a magazine says the human mind explore about 20 per cent after playing these kinds of
sports
.
For instance
, My one friend was having a phobia of heights. In order to overcome
his
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this
fear
, his father took him
to
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sky
diving and he was shivering there but with the help of
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the instructor
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instructor
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he was able to do it perfectly which help him in overcoming his
fear
. If he would not have done
sky
diving,he never would have overcome
this
fear
and after
that
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he was ready to fight his every
fear
. So,
this
sport
only
given
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gave
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him
that
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the
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confidence that if he can do it, so he can do everything. To conclude, I would say it is necessary to play these games as these games help us in overcoming our weakness, as well as these
these
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sports
,
sports
are played under the supervision of trainers.So, they are not at all dangerous.
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  • hazard assessment
  • adventure tourism
  • regulatory framework
  • personal autonomy
  • informed consent
  • risk mitigation strategies
  • thrill-seeking behavior
  • protective gear
  • extreme athleticism
  • freedom of choice
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