Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
It is very important for every individual to play
sport
as it has the bulk of advantages but there are some sports
like sky
diving and skiing which could be very unsafe for any person. I completely disagree with the statement that it is very dangerous to play such
sport
and should be banned.
Correct article usage
a sport
Firstly
, Sky
diving and skiing are also
sport
and lots of people play these sports
. I have a question : How are these games risky? The environment in which skiing is done is prepared in a way that it should not injure any player. Similarly
, sky
diving is done with lot
of precautions.Change the article
a lot
Moreover
, they provide us with trainers when in need. To illustrate, I too once got fascinated by this
game and so I too did sky
diving.While I was nervous ,the way the trainer has consoled me was exceptional.So, I think it not
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is not
extreme
Correct article usage
an extreme
sport
and need not to
be banned.
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apply
Secondly
, These types of sport
help in exploring a person and they too help to overcome fears. A survey of a magazine says the human mind explore about 20 per cent after playing these kinds of sports
. For instance
, My one friend was having a phobia of heights. In order to overcome his
Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
fear
, his father took him to
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apply
sky
diving and he was shivering there but with the help of Correct article usage
the instructor
instructor
he was able to do it perfectly which help him in overcoming his Add a comma
,instructor
fear
. If he would not have done sky
diving,he never would have overcome this
fear
and after that
he was ready to fight his every Add a comma
,that
fear
. So, this
sport
only given
him Wrong verb form
gave
that
confidence that if he can do it, so he can do everything.
To conclude, I would say it is necessary to play these games as these games help us in overcoming our weakness, as well as these Correct determiner usage
the
these
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apply
sports
, sports
are played under the supervision of trainers.So, they are not at all dangerous.Submitted by anash.suhail on
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