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Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

#people #effects #epidemic
It is certainly true that the most worrying threat to the planet is
obesity
, due to which
individuals
 are suffering from many obstacles and it is generally acknowledged that in gone are days
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 number of
individuals
 are obese as compare to past. I personally opine that fast
food
 and less physical work are the main causes of
this
 problem and in
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 I will discuss these causes along with some specific solutions
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this
 phenomenon. To commence with , there is no doubt that in the sophisticated era
people
 are becoming more obese.
First
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 and foremost reason is
that
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 highest preference
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 junk
food
.
In other words
,
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these days most
of
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individuals
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the individuals
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 have
their
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 hectic schedule due to which, they are not able to cook
food
 at home and at that time they like to eat processed
food
 which is not good for
health
. To cite with an example, it's
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 survey of 'Guardian newspaper ' it revealed that 39%of
people
 with
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fast food
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food
, facing the problem of
obesity
.
Consequently
, street
food
 is a major cause of
health
 problems
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today.
Secondly
, with the advancement of technology masses are totally dependent
of
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 electrical
equipments
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 and they do not give preference to manual work. By
this
 practice ,
individuals
 getting overweight as
compare
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 to past,when they always do work by hand.
However
 , to mention the solutions
of
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this
 occurrence. As all know that every problem can be solved by some measurements.
In addition
 ,
government
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 can
also
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helpful
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reduce
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 the
obesity
 problems among
people
, as
higher
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authority
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should provide awareness
campaign
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campaigns
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in those areas where
people
 have no knowledge regarding that how they can maintain their
health
.
As a result
,
people
 will come to know about some basic things regarding their better
health
.
Moreover
, masses ought to avoid junk
food
 and give
prepernece
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preference
 to nutritional
food
, which is prepared at him. Owing to
this
, they can easily maintain their body weight and live
healthy
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 life. In conclusion, after the above confabulation,
although
 the causes of
obesity
 have
deleterious
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 effect on humans health9yet government and
individuals
 should go hand in hand
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 curb the neck of
this
 situation, as a small step can bring mammoth change.
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