Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as the unemployed and homeless people. What is the cause of the problem? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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number of humans whose economical status is worse because of not having a job that pays and

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they can not afford a home.So, many suggest that the

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rulers must look after them. I agree with the statement only to a certain extent.Because it is true that they do not have enough opportunities due to multiple reasons

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as no education,

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facility and tend to not work at all.

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with, the major reason for citizens being unemployed is less or no education.

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might be due to their families poor financial status.

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, they might drop out from their classes

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college as he could not pay for it. Though he did not face any problems with it

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as he aged there was no one that could spare him a duty.

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on us.

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, there are a plethora of chances that

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policy could be wrongly used. Primarily, the youth can think of

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policy as an excuse for them for not studying.

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, it could inspire many working

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as well to quit their existing jobs.

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, a junior from my college got

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by it and has stopped studying with a presumption that the ruler would provide him with all the facilities. So,

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people

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plays a crucial role in making decisions. In summary, many philosopher's suggest that the elderly and needy

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the nation itself.

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, they must consider all the options that are available for it to get exploited and plan

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