Some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe advantages and disadvantages of death penalty and give your opinion.

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there are numerous disputes about
death
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penalty
. Some
people
believe that
this
kind of
punishment
is
necesary
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necessary
while others argue that it is
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objectionable
to
unclude
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include
this
penalty
.
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In this
essay I will discuss several benefits and drawbacks of
death
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penalty
and explain why
this
punishment
should not be available in our modern world. On the one hand,
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capitl
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capital
punishment
has some
andantages
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advantages
. Due to
this
sanction
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the number of crimes would be decreased. If the
death
penalty
was available,
people
would do not do any
commitment
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because they would fear
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the bucket.
For example
, in
Japan
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the number of murders is one of the lowest in the world. It can be caused by including
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function
suction
as execution.
On the other hand
, in some
situations
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the
death
penalty
is unfair and unacceptable.
Firstly
,
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innocent
people
can be
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judged
and killed
unjst
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unjust
unjustly
. Not all
court
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courts
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judge
people
fairly. In some
situations
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people
are innocent in crimes but they can be punished
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because
they are suspected due to lack of evidence, etc.
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,
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Jhon from Green Mile was accused of murder. Despite the fact that he did not do
this
crime he was
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punished as
punished
the highest
penalty
.
In addition
, capital
punishement
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punishment
not
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garatnees
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guarantees
guarantee
the total
disappearence
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disappearance
of
viloent
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violent
commitment. In some countries where
this
kind of
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action
section
is acceptable, the
numer
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number
of crimes do not change. To sum up,
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including
punishment
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such
as capital
punishment
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may
have some benefits.
However
, the drawbacks overweigh the advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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