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Today, more and more people use robots to do tasks at home and work. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Why?

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Nowadays, we have seen a dramatic increase in the use of robots in offices or homes as individual assistance.Vile there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary,I personally believe the benefits of using
this
 new technology far outweigh its drawbacks.These benefits are twofold.
First
 of all,it is an indisputable fact that advance in technology has revolutionized the way we do our duties.New inventions
such
 as smart vacuum cleaners, microwaves or the new generation of washing machines , which do home choruses more easily and faster only by getting them some easy order.In fact, these types of home appliances not only make life easier but
also
 the amount of energy lost by humans during performing tasks is reduced.Resulting in having cleaner weather and saving more fossil fuels for the future.
Moreover
,human mistakes can be reduced when robots do the tasks in the manufacturers.Because of fatigue and mental distractions,workers may have some irreparable errors in the process of producing products. By using machines
instead
 of persons these types of problems may be solved. As they work with a certain plane and never be tired. Admetiadelly, not all of the tasks can be done by machines.Indeed, there is a vast majority of duties that are needed abstract thinking,the ability to understand concepts that are real, that are only processed in human brains. ,
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 when it comes to getting intelligence decisions robots can help scientists by processing information correctly. By way of conclusion,I once again reaffirm my position that the availability and using artificial have a greatly positive impact on modern life.Because of its influence on the industry and daily life.
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