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Your workplace does not have a carpark, and it is causing some problems. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter Describe the problems this is causing Explain what benefits a car park would bring to the company Suggest a solution for the car park problem

#workplace #carpark #manager #car #park #company
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to complain about the lack of parking spots near our workplace. I would like to bring your attention to
this
 problem because it refers to many workers in our branch. Almost every day we have an issue with parking spots,
moreover
, a lot of people have to leave their cars on the other side of the road. Actual situations cause a big issue for people with physical complications. Some people are late to for and the reason is the lack of the carpark. I truly believe the parking lot, can solve many problems and improve the company's image on the market.
Furthermore
, in my opinion, increasing the parking spots should convince employees back work in the company office. Some of my friends prefer to work from home because of problems with parking. It is important to mention that I have made some financial plans in case of building the car park opposite our building, the government can pay 90% of the cost if workplaces provide electric chargers in the parking lot. I believe it is a big opportunity for investment. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you need any
further
 information. Yours faithfully, John
Submitted by dariusz.slusar on

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logical structure
Try to improve the logical flow of your arguments. Ensure that each sentence and paragraph link smoothly to the next for better clarity.
complete response
To achieve a more polished letter, double-check for minor grammatical and phrasing errors. For example, 'to for' should be 'to work,' and 'increasing the parking spots' could be 'increasing the number of parking spots.'
task achievement
The letter clearly states the problems caused by the lack of a car park and suggests a practical solution involving government funding, which is well thought out.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is suitable for a formal complaint. It's respectful and professional.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph mainly focuses on a single idea, making it easier to follow your argument.
greeting and closing
The letter starts with a proper greeting and ends with an appropriate closing, which adds to the overall formality and professionalism.
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