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Car drivers and cyclists share the same roads, and this can cause problems for both of them. Why is this the case? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?

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Individuals who
drive
 a
car
 and
people
 on bikes usually do not get along together, when it comes to sharing the same
road
.Not following the rules and not driving carefully are known to be the dominant reasons
of
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 conflict on the
road
 and
this
 can lead to some serious accidents
,
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 if the actions are not taken.
To begin
 with, the majority of
cyclists
 do not take rules
serious
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,
this
 can be proven by the fact that most of the
cyclists
 are adolescents and there are no laws for them
,
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 because there is no need to prove their cycling skills and there is no license for bicycles.
For example
, a recent study by a journalist in California showed that many
cyclists
 usually do not pay attention to signs due to coming traffics and them being in a rush and the result was shocking because most of them were youngsters or even younger.
Although
, a lot of
people
 argue that
car
 owners do not notice
cyclists
 on the
road
, which is the number one cause of accidents and it is pretty understandable due to them not seeing
cyclists
 , especially at night if they are not wearing reflective vests. Some measures should be taken to alleviate the problem between
car
 drivers and
cyclists
 on the
road
. Making more cycle lanes is one of the possible ways of solving
this
 problem.The number of cities that have
this
 option is growing but have not developed it yet, because many
people
 still walk on a cycle lane which sometimes makes
cyclists
drive
 either on the
road
 or on
sidewalk
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.
Furthermore
, if everyone wants justice on the
road
, the government should make strict laws for bicycle owners. It will reduce the number of accidents and
disagreement
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 between drivers. To conclude, there can be many reasons why
cyclists
 and
people
 who
drive
 a
car
 often can not manage to
drive
 without
car
 crashes, injuries and there are many ways of solving
this
 problem for human’s safety on the
road
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • share the same roads
  • cause problems
  • lack of understanding
  • limited infrastructure
  • reckless behavior
  • increased awareness
  • education
  • enforcing traffic laws
  • regulations
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