IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Nowadays, there is a high expectative that different
kinf
Correct your spelling
kind
 of transportation will be driverless,
as a result
Linking Words
, most of
people
Add an article
the people
show examples
 will become just passengers.
This
Linking Words
technoloy
Correct your spelling
technology
 will bring plenty of
adavantages
Correct your spelling
advantages
 for humans
arund
Correct your spelling
around
 the world, but it is important to look at the other face of the benefit.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the person who is going to use the driverless
car
Use synonyms
 could do
another tasks
Replace the adjective
another task
other tasks
show examples
 while he is driving.
Aditionally
Correct your spelling
Additionally
, the
car
Use synonyms
 will choose the best route to safe time. So that, when we are doing
another activities
Replace the adjective
another activity
other activities
show examples
, we could focus
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
important
Add an article
the important
show examples
thing
Fix the agreement mistake
things
show examples
 of our life.
Although
Linking Words
 when
someome
Correct your spelling
someone
 is driving can feel some control over the machine, the feeling of freedom while we are travelling without
worring
Correct your spelling
worrying
 about traffic and secure driving has no comparison.
For instance
Linking Words
,
this
Linking Words
 transportation
breaktrough
Correct your spelling
breakthrough
 will help a busy business person or families while children are travelling with them to the school.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, most of the present,
test
Fix the agreement mistake
tests
show examples
 have
showed
Change the verb form
shown
show examples
 that there is a
hign
Correct your spelling
high
 risk of
accidentaly
Correct your spelling
accidentally
accidental
 when the computer can not detect some obstacles,
specially
Replace the word
especially
show examples
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 high speed
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
due
yo
Correct your spelling
to
show examples
 bad weather
condictions
Correct your spelling
conditions
 or night travelling. If the
car
Use synonyms
 is not able to avoid a simple accident, the
passegers
Correct your spelling
passengers
 will face a high
securuty
Correct your spelling
security
 risk. Even though with current technological advances, generally something goes wrong inside
computer
Add an article
the computer
a computer
show examples
. For
exmaple
Correct your spelling
example
 one of the driveless
cartesting
Correct your spelling
car testing
 for uber crashed
a women
Correct the article-noun agreement
women
a woman
show examples
 at night two
year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
show examples
 ago,
unfortunaties
Correct your spelling
unfortunates
 the girl died. If a human had been driven the
car
Use synonyms
, the accident would not have
been happened
Change to the active voice
happened
show examples
.
Tp
Correct your spelling
To
show examples
 sum up, saving time and travelling relax is important, but safety is most, so in my opinion with the correct
tecnology
Correct your spelling
technology
, I will be glad
travelling
Change the verb form
to travel
show examples
 in a
driveless
Correct your spelling
driverless
show examples
car
Use synonyms
 around cities and places.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Human error
  • Optimize routes
  • Fuel efficiency
  • Mobility
  • Independence
  • Eco-friendly
  • Electric technologies
  • Job losses
  • Driving-related professions
  • Hacking
  • Safety and privacy
  • Significant investment
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Unavoidable accident scenarios
What to do next:
Look at other essays: