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Some people think that newspaper are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get new better from other media platforms. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #newspaper #news #media #platforms
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absorb
 latest information whilst the remaining trusted in social media flatform when getting
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.
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 my point of view,
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 situation depends most on individuals
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, negotiating is what
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I'm
 going to give my own vision below. It is undoubtedly true that reading plays the important role in
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knowledge
-based society and bring more
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opportunities
 to
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the citizen
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. Since the pandemic, buying
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newspapers
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 can not be affordable for the minority of
inviduals
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individuals
 not solely that but
also
 going out is inhibited in
this
 period by the government
thus
 protecting
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citizens
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 and
community
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.
Moreover
,
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huge storage of
news
 can be accessed by
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portable devices with just a click and can adapt the latest
news
 in leaps and bounds
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 users remain up-to-date information. On the other side, the internet every now and
then
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does
doesn't
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a reliable information
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, and has a bunch of
news
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 were not
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 making the internet surfer confused to approach data.
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Regarding
 the origin of
newspaper
 which helps our
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client
ancient
 to access the
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announcement
 or events in the past, not only help to create choices of career but
also
 inform the accurate of
news
. Variety of things
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 when
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 a
newspaper
 so as to provide
reader
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readers
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 precisely. Those who read
newspaper
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newspapers
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likely
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 to read faster which may bring some
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 for occupation and lead to a healthy lifestyle. Ultimately, I am prefer reading
newspaper
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newspapers
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 to social media since the merits of health that radiation from
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the screen
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 can cause. But, online or offline reading
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 bring some societal values, ensure the education of one’s country
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