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Some people believe academic success depends mostly on having a good teacher. Others argue that it is the attitude of the student that matters most. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #success #teacher #attitude #student #matters
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 the most important part of
school
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 or college
life
. Scoring well in those tests and excelling in the chosen subjects is a necessity in today's world. Blessed are the students who are taught by a good
teacher
. So, I think that academic success can only be achieved if a student's positive attitude is coupled with the teachings of an honest mentor.
First
 of all, as students spend almost half
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school, a
teacher
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 their lives is as great as that of their parents.
Also
, a pupil ends up liking a particular subject depending upon the way it is taught.
For instance
, my
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 subject in school was biology because I had an amazing
teacher
 who made it very interesting and
thus
, I took up medicine as a profession.
As a result
, the importance of a tutor in shaping the success in his pupil's
life
 cannot be stressed enough.
Secondly
, the amount of knowledge a student imbibes is dependent on how much attention he pays in class. His own approach to learning things, the hard work that he is ready to put in and the dedication with which he deals with
such
 exams
also
 play a big role in deciding whether he succeeds. Someone who is determined to succeed and
thus
, devotes most of his time to studying and revising the syllabus, definitely has higher chances of excelling
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 exams. In conclusion, I would like to say that a good
teacher
 and the student's attitude are both equally important in succeeding academically as well as in
life
. A devoted mentor teaches a subject in
such
 a way that the disciples would like
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 it and always encourages his disciples to put in their best efforts in everything they do in
life
.
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