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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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All over the world, a tiny group of
people
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 make high financial gains. While a part of
society
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 thinks
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 is necessary, others feel that the government should limit it to a certain ceiling.
Jobs
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 in areas
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 as public service, banking and advertising are generally better paid. Some
people
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 would point out that these
jobs
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 are essential for
society
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, and, as those positions are usually filled with the best
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, with good curriculums,
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 they should be well recompensed. It is said that
people
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 with good skills have spent enormous effort and money on education and should be fairly rewarded.
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, there are those who say high salaries do not mean that high values are been delivered to
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, and there should be some regulation to apply some ceiling to remunerations. I agree with
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 statement because we have many
jobs
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 that are essential to our
society
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 and that delivers good value to it.
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 the high paid positions are usually occupied by well-skilled persons, that does not mean
society
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 will be benefiting from those work. Related to
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, we can mention the 2008 subprime crisis, which originally was in the heart of the financial system, where CEOs, analysts and consultants were paid millionaires wages, and ,
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 they led the economy to a very bad situation with millions of unemployed
people
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. In summary, we are living in a
society
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 where a small number of workers take home huge amounts of money, and there are those who agree with
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 situation.
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, governments should apply some limits to remuneration because high paid
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 do not mean high value delivered to
society
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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