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Some people think that teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the teenagers and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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The three diagrams provided illustrate the infrastructural changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary
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 since its construction in 1950 at intervals of thirty years. So to say, it compares the
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 and its surroundings from 1950 to that in 1980 and 2010. In 1950, there was a
school
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 building attached to a playground situated away from the main road. There were houses and
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farmland adjacent to these structures. By the year 1980, the area where the houses were situated was incorporated into the
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 campus and was divided equally to build a new science block alongside the main
school
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 building and car park. The preexisting farmland was
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 occupied and it was made into a sports field. Ten years into the
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 millennium, by 2010, the car park was expanded by taking over the sports field while the original playground was split to include a sports field within its boundaries.
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