In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

All over the world, countries have a massive budget in
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their nations
such
as transportation infrastructure, accommodation and communication
system
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systems
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. Some countries where some individuals believe that lots of money
is
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crucial in
establishment
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the standard infrastructure as
railway
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the railway
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that is
express ways
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in come
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income
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over different towns. While others argue the money is paramount for
encouragement
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the encouragement
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of public transport. In my opinion, I agree with
this
statement that
these money
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should be brought in amelioration domestic
vehicles
and
also
will discuss both these points of
views
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view
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. On the one hand, new construction which is established in
favor
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of travel between centre stimulates economics. These can be attractive tourists come across in their areas because its structures are suitable and comfortable which do not waste time in moving to other places.
In other words
, Thailand has already built new railway routes to
countryside
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the countryside
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and express trains is utilized which spend times only 5 hours
instead
of 12 hours. From Thailand’s
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statistics
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in 2010, the number of tourists increases gradually due to developed
structure
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structures
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and cutting-edge technology.
Therefore
, domestic income rises dramatically.
On the other hand
, public
vehicles
are necessary for travelling in rural and urban areas. There have been
the
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different types of transportation
such
as motorbike, sky train and
bus
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buses
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.
For example
, someone who
live
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in Thailand
injured
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was injured
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from equipment that
fall
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down to head, as
bus
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the bus
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was not old-fashioned and not
had
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security
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a security
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system.
Consequently
,
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the safety
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of
human
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is the main reason
in
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improvement
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vehicles
in
favor
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of their life. To summarize, the financial budget should be
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in
vehicles
what
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serves to
population
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the population
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for safety in livelihood. So, the government must concentrate
in
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this
field.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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