Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many employees join their
first
company
to
work
and spend their whole career till retirement.
However
, many shift their working place frequently.
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views with some personal perceptions. The shuffling between jobs
add
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the regular increments as it is easy to get 30-40% more salary as compared to
last
company
.
Moreover
, employees get
different
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type
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of experience and they learn new skills that enhance their knowledge which make them
expert
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experts
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in their field.
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, as per
employment
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Survey of Oxford university, information technology professionals get more salaries and
also
has more expertise, if they change their
job
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every four years.
Moreover
, employees do not feel
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by doing
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same
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type of
job
daily, even they get
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to face challenges in their
work
and get satisfaction as
reward
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completing
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a task. Apart from
this
, a shuffling between jobs
give
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opportunity
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the opportunity
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to
work
at different locations which enhance their living experience. Apart from
this
, getting a new
job
frequently lead worker to be updated and increase their value and enhance their confidence that they can join
new
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organisation if their present working culture is not up to mark.
In other words
,
this
confidence
is act
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same as
job
security which
consider
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important
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point if someone
spend
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long working years in a
company
.
In addition
, many people failed to flip their
job
at right time and when they want
want
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to change their organisation, they feel
them
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behind to compete for
new
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job
as they feel intense pressure to crack an interview.
Although
, working in
same
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company
represent
loyalty
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the loyalty
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of worker towards their
company
but I think, people should be loyal
first
to their
job
satisfaction along with working culture. They should shift their
job
until they find
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working place to reach their dream
job
satisfaction which can reduce their stress level of
work
to a minimal level. In conclusion, monetary benefits are
major
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a major
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reason behind
job
flipping.
Although
, many stay at one
company
because they failed to dare to leave their comfort zone
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Longevity
  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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