Environment pollution is too alarming to be managed by individuals. Real change can be made at the government level. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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the actual protection for the globe can be done only by the authority, as atmospheric impurity has been reached at

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rate and cannot be

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by the inhabitants.I, totally disagree, with

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notion that only the regime can combat with

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problem.In upcoming paragraphs, I will discuss my viewpoints with relevant examples.

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environmental pollution has been increased at

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, which is now hard to

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by people. To make the

environment

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eco-friendly relevant steps can be taken only by the ministry.

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of all, the

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government

has been already done a lot to save our planet. To cite an example, the Air Act 1974, the Water Act 1981, the

Environment

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Protection Act 1986

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laws were

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by the regime. But the reason is, we the dwellers of

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planet had not

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these laws seriously to save our ecosystem.

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still

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we have time to save it, by taking the solutions

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, we, the inhabitants take a lot of benefits from

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planet "the earth", but in

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we are playing with beauty and nature by cutting forests, by digging mines at different places, by using transports, which emits

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harmful

gasses. So, if we are doing these things, it is

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our duty to make it clean and safe.

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, we visit any beach or hill station, there are many dustbins for

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, but many inhabitants throw the

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on road

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or on ground and others,

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after watching that, start throwing

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near there,

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of in the bins. It indicates we follow others, and if any person throw that

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by taking it from ground or floor, other will feel shame and will avoid

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the same thing again.

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, if the government is doing something to save

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environment

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the environment

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, ahead, it is our responsibility to follow the rules

imlemented

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implemented

by the regime. In conclusion, it has been noticed that

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the government already doing a lot for our

environment

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our duty to make it safe and clean for our upcoming generation.we cannot leave everything on the authority, to save our globe from pollution we all should take steps together.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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