More people are spending their free time watching movies. Why is this? Is it a good or bad thing?
Nowadays, spending leisure time with some recreational activities is increasing all over the world. Many citizens have chosen movie watching as one of their pastime activities. There are several reasons for
this
behaviour, While
I understand the positive shades of this
culture, the negative impacts of this
on society outweigh the benefits.
To begin
with, the important reasons for the increased adoption of movies are their availability in the market and attractive content to pull the crowd. To elaborate the primary one further
, the availability of movies have
become so handy Correct subject-verb agreement
has
such
that there is no need to go to theatres to watch, unlike in earlier days. The famous OTT platforms, Correct quantifier usage
apply
for instance
, Netflix, Amazon
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and Amazon
prime
are releasing blockbuster films on the launch date itself. Apart from that, the recent trend of web series content is so alluring that they are not allowing the audience to divert their minds out of the story. The breathtaking narration of some of the Netflix web series, Capitalize word
Prime
for example
, Suits, Dark are
absolutely Verb problem
apply
binding
the spectator to the screen for a longer time.
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binds
However
, this
trend has two negative impacts on society. The first and the
foremost is, Correct article usage
apply
the
increased Correct word choice
that the
screentime
is detrimental to the health of many youngsters and adults. The prevailing diseases Correct your spelling
screen time
such
as obesity and dizziness are the best examples to talk about the serious impacts of this
culture. Secondly
, the social interaction between people is showing a downward trend due to
the aforementioned habit. It is largely observed that children
minds are so involved in watching interesting cartoon films Change noun form
children's
like
they forget to greet elders when they visit home.
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that
To conclude
, these days the favourite pastime activity for many is watching films. Reasons for this
culture are several in nature such
as movie content availability and its presentation. While
I agree with some positive benefits of this
behaviour, which are negligible as per
my opinion, the drawbacks are humongous in nature corresponding to health and killing the social interaction between people.Change preposition
in
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