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Some believe it is important for cities and towns to invest heavily in building large outdoor public spaces. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 investing heavily in building large outdoor public
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 are important for cities and towns.In my opinion,I agree that government should invest in building huge outdoor
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 for the public as it will greatly benefit both individuals and society. A good reason to invest in the building is that it gives people convenience and comfort who have a large family. At present,people will be ready to have more than 3 babes in their family because their parents want to be able for their son or daughter to leave a mark on life in the future.
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,family needs to be able in large buildings and outdoor public
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. Another point to consider is that outdoor
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 help to boost tourism attracts visitors from all over the world to view and enjoy the area's natural beauty.New York
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's Central Park is a classic example. The
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 was well-known for business visits prior to its development. The construction of Central Park not only allowed locals to participate in a variety of activities but
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 attracted non-business visitors from all over the world.
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, some people think that spending too much money on outdoor
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 is a complete waste of money. But it is
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 equally true that we cannot overlook the reality of the growing demand for fresh air and greenery. In conclusion, investing in outdoor
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 improves the look of a
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 and helps to promote tourism. Authorities should allocate a well-balanced budget based on the needs of the
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's growth.
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