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Some people think that the news channels and media nowadays have sensationalized and influenced people’s lives in negative ways. Others disagree and say that is also positive. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, some
people
 believe that social
media
 and
news
 channels give a negative impact on
people
, while others claim that it is not negative. In my option, I think it can be both an advantage as well as a disadvantage.
First
 and foremost, it is common that nowadays children and adults spend a
lot
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 time
in
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using social
media
. In
addtion
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addition
, adults watch
news
channel
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channels
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 approximately daily, to get vital information. It is essential for
people
 to watch
news
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the news
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 about what is going on around the world,
for instance
,
currencly
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currently
currency
, it is a serious moment in many countries due to corona. In
this
 case, it is vital to get knowledge about corona so individuals should not face any problems. On the other side, it is obvious that
media
 could give a bad
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affect
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to
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on
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childrenand
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children and
 young
people
 because
,
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 it would ruin their mental state as well as physical.
For instance
, young
people
 who spend a lot of time on social
media
,
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 will often be isolated. In fact, it leads to them not knowing how to
communication
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 with other
people
. In conclusion,
media
 and
news
 channels can have both pros and cons for everyone,
however
,
people
 should try
tackle
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 negative
news
 and try to avoid
let
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media
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the media
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 give
bad
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a bad
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 influence on them.
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