Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued by few
people
that, adds
are motivate
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an
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individuals to purchase unnecessary goods, while other's consider that, it creates awareness among
population
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the population
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about new varieties which are beneficial to make lives better. In
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I will discuss both sides as well as my viewpoints in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, some
people
who claim that due to
an advertising individuals
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advertising individuals
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are more attractive to purchase things because, they are showing more pros of every
goods
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and looks more attractive, which easily convince the world and they forced to buy unuseful things.
Secondly
, nowadays
people
become to know about different discounts by these apps and they prefer to get heavy discounts and
buying
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more material than they required.
For instance
, the Theme study has been shown that in 2016, 54%
youngsters
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of youngsters
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bought unnecessary commodities, owing to
influence
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the influence
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of social platforms. On the other side and according to my opinion, advertising
making
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people
aware
about
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every new item, which
make
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life more comfortable.
People
are became
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workaholic
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workaholics
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and they do not have enough time to visit stores and come to know about new products, so
adds
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ads
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are helping them.
In addition
to
this
, adds
also
meeting the growing demands of
people
, because advanced technology
make
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them more curious about
standard
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lifestyle. To justify it,
people
became aware of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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through
adds
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ads
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and they preferred to use
it
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them
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because it helps to keep house spic and spin. To conclude,
although
advertising
convincing
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people
to buy unnecessary things;
however
, I believe that advertising is necessary to make
people
aware
about
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of
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new products and make their life more comfortable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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