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many people think that to become a successful specialist, it is better to choose a career early in life and never change it later. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #specialist #career #life #change
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In recent times, the public is striving towards perfection in their
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life
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. A sizable group believe that in order to obtain a successful future, we should opt for a path at an early age and
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 on it diligently rather than changing it in future. I partially disagree with
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 on enhancing
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 skill set
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 required to excel in their career.
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 facilitates their chances of becoming successful.
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, if a child decides to become a specialist in a particular occupation, there is a high probability that
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 might not be changed as it is based on own interest and goal and might be motivated enough to attain the desired outcome.
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 as swimmers and cricket players. They train themselves from a very young age towards their journey to become successful athletes and won numerous medals representing their country which provides a sense of satisfaction.
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, other aspects to the job role that the child chooses in the early stages of
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. Some youngsters tend to make decisions solely based on financial benefits and does not consider the other aspects,
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, there are individuals who train themselves to become banking professionals. It might seem rewarding to earn a huge salary,
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, due to lack of promotions or high stress associated with the role might affect the
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 balance.
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, people look for opportunities in a different field and move to an entirely new role In conclusion,
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 it appears that the path chosen during the early stages of
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 to be rewarded with high chances of success if we continue to
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 without switching it, there are certain factors that need to be considered in order to make decisions later in
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 as the circumstances vary among individuals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Specialization
  • Skill development
  • Expertise
  • Proficiency
  • Competitive edge
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Adaptability
  • Industry changes
  • Burnout
  • Diverse skill set
  • Job satisfaction
  • Personal growth
  • Financial insecurity
  • Transferable skills
  • Lifelong learning
  • Mid-career shift
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