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Some people think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In
this
 day and age,
students
 have to learn various
subjects
 and some of them can be quite challenging. Among them, mathematics and philosophy are considered as too hard to comprehend.
Therefore
, many propose that these
subjects
 should not be mandatory but to be chosen at s
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the student's
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tudent's
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students'
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disposal. In my opinion, I partly agree with
this
 statement and the rationales will be discussed in
this
 essay.
First
 and foremost, these
subjects
 should be compulsory due to i
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need for student's development. Mathematics consists of numerous equations and requires lots of calculation which can help to attain logical thinking and p
roblem solving
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skills.
On the other hand
, philosophy contains various abstracts which are sometimes hard to perceive but the rewards are the understanding of oneself and identifying personal characteristics. These
subjects
 are so important that the university requires freshmen to have a certain degree of knowledge in these fields before studying any
further
 education.
However
, the school should not make
students
 learn t
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much of these
subjects
 because they
also
 need to consolidate other skill sets.
Students
 should rather spend more time acquiring and sharpening their strong p
oint
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points
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which can h
elps
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help
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them to identify their passion and meet the employer's n
eed
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needs
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in t
he
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future career. For those who chase the dream of becoming an entrepreneur, b
eside
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learning math, they
also
 need to hone their interpersonal skills and get to know more about the asset and the property a
ccquisition
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acquisition
which form the fundamental of business. As the result,
students
 will likely t
o e
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arn a successful career while maintaining the w
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work-life
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ork- life
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work-life
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balance without being snowed under the paperwork. In all, mathematics and philosophy are the keys to a
chive
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achieve
logical thinking and the understanding of the ego but
students
 should balance the amount of time s
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on these and focus more on their strong p
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in order to nurture their talent which is crucial for future job. In my opinion, I think the school should take the lead in regulating what
subjects
 will the
students
 learn and n
evigate
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navigate
them to identify which types of works that they want to do in the future.
Submitted by Andy on

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