Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money while others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some think that people should be accepted
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their terrible conditions
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unsatisfactory employment and shortage of capital. Others believe that
this
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situation
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could be developed by
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.
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discusses
both viewpoints, I strongly agree with the former opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand, some optimistic
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people
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said that should accept the bad condition of
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public
life
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. If a person
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accepts
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to
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their
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unpleasant
position, he would be affected by mental depression due to they will feel about their
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and
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their current
life
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.
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, a recent report by the Times of India said that more than 60% of the population have killed themselves because
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they did not like
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their financial status and an unsatisfactory
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work.
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, the public is being accepted to their status while they live happily.
On the other hand
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, every individual has a right to improve their
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unpleasant
position like a wealthy lifestyle.
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Hard work
can lead to improving current status, if a man does not have happy about their job, he would be changed to their now employment because the satisfaction is the most important aspect for everyone's work period.
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instance, Indian people always try to improve their financial condition from underprivileged into the wealthy lifestyle,
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are working
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regularly
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, people should be tried to develop their current
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to
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next
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the next
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level
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life
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. To conclude, not accepting
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real-time
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,
as a result
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,
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this
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can lead to the
folks
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are killing themselves and creating mental
presssure
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pressure
who
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whom
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life
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hates
folks
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.
Hardwork
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Hard work
and motivation
has
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to develop the
folks
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capital position and
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the satisfaction of job so they should be tried often. In my opinion, about
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, each and every
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folks
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should be improved their today's
situation
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into a good and better lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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