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government should spend money on railways rather than roads

#government #money #railways #roads
Recently, population growth cases increase in transports.
People
 would use various means for their transportation, which includes taxi, metro, bicycle and
privet
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private
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 car.
As a result
, there might be
traffic
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a traffic
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jam
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jams
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 and crowded
metros
. Some
people
 believe that government should invest more
on
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 railways rather than
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the road
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road
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roads
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. I personally agree with
this
 view and I will elucidate my reasons in the following.
First
,
metros
 have more capacity than other transport vehicles, which can convey 2 to 3
people
 a once.
Metros
 can carry 100 or 200
person
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people
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in
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at
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 each stop
that
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 is much more than other vehicles.
Metros
 work with electricity and they could
be consider
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 as
green
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a green
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 transport system
,
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 since they do not pollute
air
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the air
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. Other forms of pollutions like noise would not be produced when
metros
 become prevalent.
As a result
, global warming, which is one of
consequences
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the consequences
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 of fusil foils would be mitigated.
Secondly
,
metros
 are expeditious and can take
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long
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a long
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distance
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distances
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 in a minute. Their passengers who commute would not get exhausted.
Itinerant
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The itinerant
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passenger
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passengers
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 would rarely feel stress and anxiety because of traffic
jam
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jams
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 and they could be on time since there would not be crowded
in
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apply
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tunnels. It is true that
cost
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for
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of
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 railways is much higher than roads and they need more time and energy
however
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, there are hundreds of benefits, which would be brought.
For instance
,
distance
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the distance
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 would not be a problem
any more
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anymore
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.
People
 would travel where they want in a minute, which was
skeptical
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 because of
long
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the long
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 and teeming road. In conclusion, more investment
on
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in
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 railways would improve citizen life quality and
imped
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impede
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pollution
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the pollution
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 rate for
city
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the city
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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