government should spend money on railways rather than roads

Recently, population growth cases increase in transports.
People
would use various means for their transportation, which includes taxi, metro, bicycle and
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car.
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, there might be
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jam
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and crowded
metros
. Some
people
believe that government should invest more
on
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railways rather than
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the road
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road
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. I personally agree with
this
view and I will elucidate my reasons in the following.
First
,
metros
have more capacity than other transport vehicles, which can convey 2 to 3
people
a once.
Metros
can carry 100 or 200
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in
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each stop
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is much more than other vehicles.
Metros
work with electricity and they could
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as
green
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transport system
,
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since they do not pollute
air
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. Other forms of pollutions like noise would not be produced when
metros
become prevalent.
As a result
, global warming, which is one of
consequences
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of fusil foils would be mitigated.
Secondly
,
metros
are expeditious and can take
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long
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distance
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in a minute. Their passengers who commute would not get exhausted.
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passenger
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passengers
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would rarely feel stress and anxiety because of traffic
jam
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and they could be on time since there would not be crowded
in
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tunnels. It is true that
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for
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railways is much higher than roads and they need more time and energy
however
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, there are hundreds of benefits, which would be brought.
For instance
,
distance
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the distance
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would not be a problem
any more
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.
People
would travel where they want in a minute, which was
skeptical
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because of
long
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and teeming road. In conclusion, more investment
on
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railways would improve citizen life quality and
imped
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impede
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pollution
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rate for
city
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the city
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.
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