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As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon known as globalization. Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement؟

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Without any doubt, it has evident that nowadays communications and transportation have been widespread which reaching people to
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 phenomena. Individuals believe that people will lose their cultural identity over time due to globalisation. Personally, I only agree with
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 view under certain situations and believe that
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 has little effect on people´s
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 with, family roots are inherited from their parents in their blood. As long they are raised in the communities with their parent´s identical
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, they will remain to follow their parents´
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 could lead to people´s realisation of how they are different from individuals in other countries.
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, learning another language, unique local cuisine and so on.
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, some unusual
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 may become popular worldwide due to the phenomenon.
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, information becomes available due to globalisations.
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, " the trade" of important information
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 as scientist researcher and technologies should be shared worldwide.
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, sharing knowledge between nations will help the developing countries to grow faster and improve their economics.
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, it has been suggested that nations may not only save their culture, language and traditions
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 share them with the rest of the world. On the other side, despite all the advantages, there are crucial disadvantages.
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, Worker could move from a less developed country to a more one developed.
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 can have a serious consequence, not only for the economy and the populations but for the disappearance of the whole civilisations. To conclude,
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 is a fundamental change in the world with political, economic and cultural implementation.
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, I disagree with the statement, because the proper control of
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 phenomenon, may have some positive consequences for the whole culture as a whole.
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