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Many students have to study subjects which they donot like. some people think this is a complete waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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Few people believe that, in today's Schooling system, Students are made to study the subjects which they do not want to and it is totally waste of time. I completely disagree with
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 statement because Education is a very powerful medium to grow in life and perceive something important and
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 no knowledge get wasted and can be worn at any time. On one hand, people feel that students studying un-liked subjects are waste of time because,
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, a pupil likes art and if urged to study science, he might seem himself under pressure and mentally get blasted with studies
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 can be diverted to other illegal activities.
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 letting them study their interesting topics is better than forcing them to take up the un-interested field.
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, students at a young age can be moulded in, either way,
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 every fresher needs a guide who makes him walk in the right path, it can be his parents or tutors.
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, the universe is at its leading edge due to the advanced technology,
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, the job market is demanding the high skilled finalists in various sections, provided that having learnt varied topics widens their offers. To illustrate, a survey was conducted by Cambridge university where a majority of workers with different skills were in a higher position than the single or doubled skilled person. In conclusion, I agree with the opinion that learning various kinds of subjects in school where learners get an abundance of knowledge which places him above all.
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