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Some people prefer to work for a large company while others prefer to work for small company. Discuss and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, being an employee in a
company
 is very popular. Some
people
 prefer working in a large
company
, while some
people
 argue that working in a small
company
 is better.
To begin
 ,with favour to work in a large
company
, most large companies’ employees receive more benefits than small companies’
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, including reputation. When
people
 are employed by large companies, they will be well-known and famous. They will receive more respect from our society than those who work in a small office.
For instance
, my uncle is working in a well-known
company
 and get much respectable and become a famous person among business
people
.
Moreover
, their benefits
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 by an employee benefits package
such
 as insurance to ensure their workers gain the highest facilities.
On the other hand
, there are some arguments that being employed in a small
company
 is more pleasant. The small-sized business is made up of only a few workers and the advantages of
this
 are employees have less competition for promotion or lower rivals to raise themselves to higher positions. My mother has a job in a small-sized office and her position has grown considerably.
Although
 it significantly went up, she always feels less stressed and happier in her working place. One that I prefer is the latter view. There is a more friendly atmosphere resulting from workers always making friends with other colleagues by talking and eating together.
Additionally
, they always give souvenirs to their colleagues after their holiday trips. In conclusion, I am convinced that the happy atmosphere and less stress in employees’ offices have many positive impacts not only in their working time but
also
 their daily life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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