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Many countries aim to improve their living standard by economic developnent but some important social values are lost as a result. Do you think advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages.

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The pie chart illustrates an average USA citizen regular intake of
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, saturated fat and
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 in their diet. The unit of measure in percentages. Overall, it is evident that most of the individuals consumed
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 and saturated fat during dinner. The trend represents that breakfast contains less amount of
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, saturated fat and
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. which is approximately 16%.
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 percentage had increased significantly and the percentage went up t0 29%,26% and 19%. In lunch,
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 and fat are share a major contribution of 65% of the whole. During ,snacks
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 composition was taken by
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 with 42% of total evening snack intake.
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 and saturated fat are only 35% combined. At dinner, People of the USA are more likely to have
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 in their food which is 43% of all. Meanwhile, individuals have 37% of fat in their portion and the least intake was
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 which accounts for only 23% of whole food.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • living standards
  • economic development
  • infrastructural facilities
  • unemployment
  • poverty levels
  • technological advancements
  • environmental degradation
  • biodiversity
  • income disparities
  • cultural heritage
  • sustainable growth
  • stress levels
  • policy-making
  • mitigate
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