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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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A highly controversial issue today relates to whether it is wise to consume the
information
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 using paper-based products and television or
people
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 should find news via the
internet
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 on websites using personal
computers
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 or mobile
phones
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. In
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 essay, I am going to examine
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 issue from both points of view and
then
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 explain why I believe that
people
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 should find the golden balance between traditional and modern news sources. Nowadays, the penetration level of the
internet
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 and smart mobile gadgets is dramatically increasing globally.
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, the
internet
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 is the only gate for an almost unlimited amount of new
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 where
people
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 could get access in a more convenient way than using newspapers or television.
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, the main feature of the
internet
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 is the speed and the spreading rate.
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, if somebody makes a post on Twitter with emergency news, every subscriber can get
this
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 up-to-date
information
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 almost instantaneously. Despite the fact that the
internet
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 on mobile
phones
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 and
computers
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 is the convenient way to be in touch with the world, it has some drawbacks. The way that
people
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 use their
phones
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 and
computers
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 could be a reason
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eyes
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 health issues.
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, the distance between screen and
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 in many cases does not exceed 30
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, so
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 distance and the light could damage the
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eyes
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 ability to focus on long distances.
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 why it is crucial to encourage
people
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 to change the
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 sources to another,
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 as newspapers or TV.
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,
people
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 appreciate books because they contain unique
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 or stories that shouldn't be up-to-date, so TV and newspaper companies could reconsider their formats and
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 to attract
new
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 and previous
audience
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audiences
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. In conclusion, it stands to reason to highlight that both points have their metrics and, while consuming new
information
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 on a daily basis,
people
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 should find the proper balance between using newspapers or TV and using mobile
phones
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 or
computers
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 to maintain
eyes
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' health on the high level.
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