Some people believe that spending money on developing technology on space exploration is unjustifiable and there are more beneficial ways to spend this money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Space exploration plays a pivotal role for the country.
Although
it is sometimes thought to
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money
on developing technology is unsupported, others believed that there are many profitable ways to spend
this
money
. In my opinion, I consider that government should use
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on
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benefical
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beneficial
ways
such
as medical care and
education
, but space research is
also
necessary. A good reason to put wealth on
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is that
education
is essential to get more educated
people
, and they can earn name and fame across the world, and it would be proud for the country.
Furthermore
,
education
brings positivity and prosperity
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society. Having resources of skilled and
knoeledgeable
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knowledgeable
professionals will lead
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rewards to
association
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.
Therfore
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Therefore
, it is very useful to spend
money
on
education
. Another point to consider
puting
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putting
money
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health
center
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is that
people
from poor backgrounds are deprived of treatment because they are not able to pay these fees.
For instance
, a person from China died of cancer as he did not have enough
money
for his surgery. So, there are many
people
who die due to
lack
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of access to therapy.
Hence
,
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should spend
money
on it to decline
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ratio.
On the other hand
, the use of space exploration
have
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very few merits.
Firstly
, it can be used for the country security in the latter stage but very few of them get a and full of experience.
Secondly
, most of the public are not
awer
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aware
of what developments are going
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this
area.
This
in a way loses the interest of the
people
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this
field. In conclusion, funding
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education
and medical facilities should be kept
first
because many
people
are still missing it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • justified expenditure
  • technological advances
  • earthly concerns
  • telecommunications
  • environmental conservation
  • inspire innovation
  • diplomatic relationships
  • peaceful cooperation
  • long-term survival
  • colonization
  • commercial ventures
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