More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Obesity is one of the most

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issues in the growing countries. Fast

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life style

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is one of the main

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obesity and it leads to many health issues at

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young age. Nowadays, people are quite busy with their work schedule that they do not even have time for themselves to eat proper nutritional

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. In that case, parents give packaged

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which has the highest calories. In order to

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the family's need, both husband and wife

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to work and nobody has adequate time to cook for lunch and dinner both so half of the time, they opt for the restaurant

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or order it online. Another reason is

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prefer junk

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healthy

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social media platforms and tempting tv advertisements play a vital role to encourage children to have junk

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example, burgers and chips and make them hefty.

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only need a reason to eat from the outside yet

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aware of the consequences. Parents, sometimes do not realize the adverse

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calories. New generation

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and play games online or watch tv and do not go out to play which makes them obese. Gaining weight at

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young age cause diabetes and blood

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health issues. Some

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even have thyroid

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of their accessive

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parent

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do not pay much attention to their kid's diet which results

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
sedentary
caloric intake
processed foods
fast food culture
screen time
metabolic disorders
healthcare expenditure
lifestyle diseases
preventative strategies
nutritional education
public health policy
body mass index (BMI)
emotional well-being
stigmatization
exercise regimen
eating habits
junk food
socioeconomic factors
health literacy

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