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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • explain why you would like the job - • give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Mr. &
Mrs.
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 Wallace, I am writing regarding an advertisement published in an Australian family and kids magazine
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 week. As you are looking for a caregiver to take care of your kid and live with you for
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 short term, I believe that I am suitable for
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 role.
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, I would like to apply for
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 job, and I would appreciate
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 you could consider my application and CV. I, Jenny Chen, am currently working at the ACC kindergarten in Bangkok, Thailand. I have seven years of experience in looking after children under nine years old.
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, I plan to study
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education for early childhood in Australia
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 year.
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, I would like to prepare myself and learn more about
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 culture before the semester starts.
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, I love taking of children and have high energy to play with them all day. On top of that, I have the most valuable qualities which are necessary for
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. As I mentioned above, I am pursuing my
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 education in Master of Education for early childhood.
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, in my pastime, I will prepare myself to study and join the communities to gain more local experience in the land
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down under. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you. Sincerely, Jenny Chen
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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