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Some people think that governments should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The given line graphs provide data about the percentages of families with gadgets in one country during a 99-year period, along with the
hours
 of doing home chores by those families, over the same years. Overall, there appears to be a reverse correlation between the increase of using household appliances and
hours
 of working at home. The more people moved to use gadgets, the less time they would spend working at home. Regarding electronic appliances, in 1920, the refrigerator was the least bought appliance by the inhabitants of the country by around 1 %. Following
this
,
this
 electronic product had surged dramatically, surpassed all, and reached 100% in 1980, at which point it remained stable to the end of the period. As far as the vacuum cleaner is concerned, in the beginning, only one in 3 families had
this
 product.
However
,
this
 figure had experienced a rising trajectory, like refrigerator, and reach to 100% in 2000, after which it levelled off.
In contrast
, washing machine by standing at 40% was the
first
 used appliance by people in 1920,while it rose to 70% in 1960, it fluctuated widely and end the period at just over 70%. Looking specifically and the impact of increasing the usage of equipment on
hours
 of doing household chores, it can be seen that
this
 figure dipped significantly from 50
hours
 in 9020 to 20
hours
 in 1960. From 1960 onward, it
also
 decreased slightly, halved and ended at 10
hours
 a week in 2019.
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