Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

It is undeniable that tons of criminals continue to commit
crime
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after being punished.
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the reasons and solutions to deal with
this
problem. There are several reasons why crimes tend to
reoffend
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re-offend
.
To begin
with, it might be hard for them to find a job because most
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companies
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the companies
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avoid employing a person who has
imprisoned
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.
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, the manager often scares that people with
criminal
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background
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will threaten the safety of their company.
In addition
, people who
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been put in
a
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prison may have
lack
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a lack
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of
skills
and
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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that meet the job requirements
such
as computer
skills
, or communication
skills
.
Besides
, prisoners can make friends together and continue to keep in touch after releasing from jails.
Then
they can gather and do bad things
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other or someone will hire them to do illegal acts like kidnapping. To solve
this problems
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, the government and community could do something to help them.
First
of all, companies should give
opporturnities
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opportunities
to everyone equally,
as a result
, people who was in prison can work and earn money.
For instance
, if they have sufficient abilities, the employer is able to give them a chance.
On the other hand
, the government can organise some training courses in jails or let them do some manual labour works
such
as construction
worker
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workers
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, aircraft
mechanic
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. To sum up, it is true that offends can commit
crime
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crimes
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again because they find it difficult to find an occupation and find it easier to do illegal things to make money.
Therefore
, the government and society should give them more chances by giving them jobs and opening training classes in prisons to help them gain more practical
skills
and knowledge.
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  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation programs
  • social stigma
  • ex-convicts
  • reintegration
  • support systems
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  • addiction problems
  • criminal networks
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