Without a shadow of a doubt,
people
’s opinions can exert influence on individuals.
However
, an unanswered question in
this
area is whether today’s
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their appearance or humans are not concerned about
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and have. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that in
this
modern era,
people
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about their acquirement and
possessions
. To support
this
idea, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly substantiated in the following paragraphs.
First
and foremost, the crux of the matter lies in the fact that with the advance of technology
people
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. Since technology generation provides a network in which mankind can be aware
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others' lives, including their lifestyle, habits, clothes,
possessions
, to name but a few.
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care
a
lot
about their appearance and their acquirement to show themselves better than their peers, companions, and followers. In fact,
people
try to introduce themselves as dominant individuals who are in a high class than others, and they are struggling in
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ease about others’ judgements.
Another prominent motive to be mentioned is that today’s
people
have more tendencies to have a luxurious lifestyle which stems from their concern about others’ opinions and judgment about their lives. To shed more light on the matter, nowadays
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elaborated and high-tech
possessions
,
for example
, having a luxury house and cars in comparison to the past
people
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people
who were living in the past found their happiness in their simple lifestyles without engaging themselves in being
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. To put it in a more vivid picture, take my father’s experience as a convincing example. When my father tells about his memory, he always mentions that in the past,
people
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a happy life by having good companions.
On the contrary
, he has experienced a completely different lifestyle in
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, where we are living. Indeed, he thinks
people
are nowadays more anxious about what they have and what they wear since they
care
a
lot
about other ones’ standpoint rather than having a happy life.
Reflecting upon all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that nowadays
people
care
a
lot
about others’ opinions and judgments of their
possessions
;
thus
, they try to have splendid things. It is highly recommended to conduct a survey to gain insight into others’ points of
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about
this
idea.