In Britain,when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other older people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care,the government or the family?

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many occasions, older

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in Britain are taken to geriatric homes to be looked after. More often than not,the

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takes

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of their expenses. While it can be costly to take

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of the old

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's needs,I believe the

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should pay for their upkeep since most of them serve in public service

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better part of their lives and

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old

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are not productive and

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tend to neglect and abandon them.

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majority of

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tend to serve in the public sector during their working years. During

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period they contribute to the growth of their country and

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at large.

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,most public servants contribute taxes from their earnings,

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are channelled to the respective authorities and are used to run

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projects.

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, most elderly

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tend to be neglected and abandoned by their families.

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is because they are less productive and wholely dependant on them. Old age

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tends to be associated with many health conditions which are so expensive and psychologically draining to the

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, the authorities should pay for their

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in homes where they will be helped to meet their needs and be in their optimal capacity to lead a dignified life.

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elderly

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to be taken

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of by their families.

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will not only give them a

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of belonging but

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give a

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of responsibility to the family members.

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, parents work hard to take

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of their children needs and in

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when they get old,the same children should take

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of their aged parents. In conclusion

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I believe both

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and family

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their roles in the

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of the elderly. As much as

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should pay for

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because

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this

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people

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serve in the public service and they tend to be abandoned,

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the family

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family

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should be incorporated in the

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of their elderly

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with subsidized costs.

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will not only give the old a

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of belonging

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but

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give the family a

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of responsibility.