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the proportion of people assessing six aspects of one city's life as good, average, or bad, in 1980 and 2010.

The tables illustrate the proportion of people assessing six aspects of one city's life as good, average, or bad, in 1980 and 2010. Overall,
healthcare
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,
education
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, and the environment were given the highest scores in both years, and transport facilities received the lowest. Meanwhile,
education
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's rating rose over the period, while that of transportation fell. In 1980, people rated
healthcare
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,
education
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, and the environment the highest, with over 80% approving of
healthcare
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, while the other two had figures of 72%. Under 10% of respondents thought these three services were bad. As for shopping and unemployment, both had similar figures, as 62-64% expressed approval, and 22- 24% said they were average. Only a half of those surveyed gave a high score to transportation, with roughly a
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 stating it was bad.  Turning to 2010, the most significant changes were seen in
education
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, as over 80% were happy with it, and in
healthcare
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 ,whose good rating fell to 74%. The employment situation improved, as in 2010, almost three-quarters of those asked expressed satisfaction.
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, approval of the transport facilities fell to 39%, and a similar proportion stated it was bad.
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, with regard to the environment and shopping, their approval levels both remained relatively unchanged.

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