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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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It is often argued that the happiest period in human’s
lives
 is the time when they are teenagers because they do not worry about
life
’s responsibility. While some people believe that even though
adults
 have
much
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 duties to be responsible for, they can
also
 bring happiness because they have
freedom
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the freedom
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 for spending money. I firmly believe that
adults
 of working-age be able to enjoy their
life
 more than adolescence. On the one hand, some older people think that teenage years are the happiest time in people’s
lives
this
 is because they do not have their responsibility especially, financial management
such
 as worrying about
utility
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 bill at the end of the month.
However
, teenagers cannot make their own money which means that their income is from parents only.
This
 makes they do not have financial freedom.
For example
, Most adolescences in South Korea have to study extra classes after school. Money that they receive cannot cover the daily expenditure.
This
 is the one factor of stress leading to an
increased
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 high rate of suicide. I personally disagree that adolescence has the happiest time.
On the other hand
, people think that adult
life
 has more happiness, despite an oflot responsibility. The adult can work and has stable
lives
 which are they do not rely on someone and have more freedom in lifestyle. Especially
adults
 in the working age, they have more experience and financial power to balance between work and
life
.
For example
, many office workers in Thailand be able to hang out with colleagues during weekdays.
This
 reflex that under heavy-duty, they have the capability to arrange
lives
 on the right track. I believe that they are more enjoyable than teenage years age. In conclusion,
although
 many believe that teenagers are the happiest moment in
life
, they are not able to live their
lives
 freely as they wish. While many
adults
 can enjoy the moment without any financial conditions.
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