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The threat of nuclear weapons maintain world peace.Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy .The benefit of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantage.To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Introduction
Astronomy is extremely expensive annually
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tax payers
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equipments
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 preparation and training of astronauts is vital.
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economy
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is thrived
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 and job vacancies becomes minimal.
Body paragraph 1
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space
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 exploration requires
alot
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 of equipment preparations.
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 is to facilitate a safe journey in
space
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 without causing accidents in the atmosphere.
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, astronauts are to be well furnished with sufficient knowledge to operate rockets
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, how to identify various objects in the air.
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 will facilitate better scientific inventiveness about
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 life.
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, recent studies illustrate that
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 Americans spend
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sum
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 of money yearly facilitating
space
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 exploration which has eventually led to
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 number of demerits.
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, exploring the
space
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 is a fascinating activity
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 it requires
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 purchase and training of manpower to be involved.
Body paragraph 2
On the contrary
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, countries carrying out astronomy experiences demerits
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deterioration
 of the economy.
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outrageous
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 sum of money is budgeted in preparation
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 the exploration.
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, job opportunities become minimal since there is
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a reduction
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 in wages for the workers. Unfortunately, many individuals are rendered jobless
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 of
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, statistics in Australia show that
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 criminal activities are on the rise due to
unemployment
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 state of many people because the nation is facing bankruptcy related to recent
space
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 studies preparations. In that case, studies of the atmosphere
results
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to
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 a great number of downfalls
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 a country.
Conclusion
In conclusion, exploring the atmosphere has led to nations spending exclusively high sums of cash
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 exploiting
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taxpayers
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tax payers
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 every year.
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 is due to
training
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 of scientists,
purchase
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the purchase
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 of rockets and team preparations.
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, demerits
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 as plummeting the economy and rendering humans jobless
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 from devising astronomy.

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