Nowadays, some parents put a lot of pressure on their children. What are the reasons for parents doing that? Is this a positive or negative development for the children?

The Line graph depicts the amount of three spreads(
Margarine
,Low fat&Reduced spread and
Butter
) were consumed over 26
years
of period, which is from 1981 to 2017. Units measured in
Grams
. Overall, it can be seen that
margarine
and
butter
consumption decreased over a given period of time, while, for low fat&Reduces spreads,it rose.
Initially
in 1991
butter
was the most popular spread, which is been replaced by
margarine
from 1991 to 2001, and
then
low-fat and reduced spreads became the most widely used spread in the final
years
.
Initially
, the uptake of
butter
began at approximately 140
grams
and peaked at 160
grams
in 1986.
Moreover
,In the following
years
, it was gradually reduced to 50
grams
in 2007.
Similarly
, about 90
grams
of
margarine
was eaten in the
first
year it
also
, reached a peak of 100
grams
and remains steady till 1996 since
then
, there is a drop in intake as a consequence, it reached to 40
grams
in 2007
Secondly
, the consumption of low fat and
butter
began at about 10
grams
in 1996,
then
increased significantly and reached around 90
grams
in 2001, slowly, the rate of consumption declined in final
years
to approximately 70
grams
in 2007.
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