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Many people are now opting to provide technology companies with their personal data in exchange for access to the software. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

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In the modern ,era everyone is going to depend on vast technology.Technology
companies
 develop
operating
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an operating
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 system
that is
 helpful for an individual in their daily routine
life
.Some segment of
people
 gives their personal material, in ,exchange they get
connection
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 to the
software
.It could be harmful to an individual's personal
life
 and for national security as well.Its disadvantages are more than advantages,which is going to explain in the upcoming paragraphs.
First
 and foremost,
nation
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nations
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 nowadays very much rely on modern technology.
People
 are ready to give their important personal data to
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the association
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association
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associations
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 to get
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an
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approach to numerous
software
.After getting the data these firms sold it to
telecom
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the telecom
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 team and to
other manufacturing club
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another manufacturing club
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.It might be possible that instruction will be used by some terrorist groups,which could be quite challenging for national security.
For instance
,Facebook,Whatsapp,Google
such
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are such
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 types of messenger
program
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programs
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 always ask your private identity before accessing the
software
.When they have achieved the data they used it and sell it to some other firms without knowing the background of the club,Some terrorist groups follow the
companies
 and start creating threats for the country or many
crowd
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.
On the other hand
,it is good from some other perspective,in today's machinery era
people
 don't have enough time to spend on a single activity.They focused to become multi-task.
Software
 always gives ease to them to achieve their goals.If
people
 carefully provide personal information to
companies
,It would be more efficient.For ,example Google maps help the community to know the way on the roads.It makes
life
 easier,a man has no need to remember the ways. In the conclusion, It is true that
companies
 demand personal information
then
 they provide access to
software
,which could be halting your personal and social
life
.on the other ,hand it gives a number of facilities which leads to the success of human
life
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